Beautiful story. I love how it moves from past to present, with the past still very much present. The reveal of her daughter was both surprising and inevitable. Her emotions around aging and regret are treated with deftness and care. I enjoyed the many turns of phrase, e.g. this one: "sharp slap of mortality". Bravo!
Thank you! I am still overwhelmed with everyones (by everyone I mean the Same Walk vol 1 collective) support and kind words. It’s been such an enjoyable, emotional experience. And thank you again for reading my story! 🙏
The way you encapsulate so much in such a short amount of space, which allows us to understand her parents, her lover, her child, her friend and her regrets is so incredible. I feel like I understood each of her choices, and why she would have chosen the harder path of raising her daughter alone. I love that we end back in the present, where two people who haven't seen each other in 21 years are about to have their lives completely changed.
Such a pleasure to read and such real characters -- grappling with major choices from the past. I love these kinds of examinations and dilemmas. Thanks for sharing this.
Our subjects are very, very closely related -- handled differently, different characters, but related. I'm not urging you to read it. I blew well. past the 2800 word limit, but if you are one of the readers here that is reading all of the other submissions, then I hope you get to mine, too. We really are sharing something in our prompts.
I did read yours, and I think my ❤️ was one of the first! I admit the skill in your writing made me very nervous about folks getting to my pieces but as you say, we've taken the prompts from different perspectives and both stories stand alone. I've thoroughly enjoyed this project, it's helped my writing (I'm relatively new to fiction, just started last summer) and confidence in ways I couldn't have predicted.
It sucks, but I'm not sure I'm going to be able to make this. I have a play I'm seeing on Saturday night. Maybe I have a window for both. I certainly hope so. I'll be very disappointed not to be in that virtual room. People have given so much of themselves to this.
Beautiful story. I love how it moves from past to present, with the past still very much present. The reveal of her daughter was both surprising and inevitable. Her emotions around aging and regret are treated with deftness and care. I enjoyed the many turns of phrase, e.g. this one: "sharp slap of mortality". Bravo!
Thank you! I am still overwhelmed with everyones (by everyone I mean the Same Walk vol 1 collective) support and kind words. It’s been such an enjoyable, emotional experience. And thank you again for reading my story! 🙏
The way you encapsulate so much in such a short amount of space, which allows us to understand her parents, her lover, her child, her friend and her regrets is so incredible. I feel like I understood each of her choices, and why she would have chosen the harder path of raising her daughter alone. I love that we end back in the present, where two people who haven't seen each other in 21 years are about to have their lives completely changed.
Thank you so much🙏 this was the second story so I didn’t have as much time, but it almost wrote itself
You nailed it! I love the cliffhanger, and that you allow us to make some assumptions going forward after she sees the blue eyes again...
Such a pleasure to read and such real characters -- grappling with major choices from the past. I love these kinds of examinations and dilemmas. Thanks for sharing this.
Thank you - it was a big subject to take on in 2800 words, I'm so pleased it's found its feet here. Thank you for reading and commenting. 😃
Our subjects are very, very closely related -- handled differently, different characters, but related. I'm not urging you to read it. I blew well. past the 2800 word limit, but if you are one of the readers here that is reading all of the other submissions, then I hope you get to mine, too. We really are sharing something in our prompts.
I did read yours, and I think my ❤️ was one of the first! I admit the skill in your writing made me very nervous about folks getting to my pieces but as you say, we've taken the prompts from different perspectives and both stories stand alone. I've thoroughly enjoyed this project, it's helped my writing (I'm relatively new to fiction, just started last summer) and confidence in ways I couldn't have predicted.
I'm delighted we are fellow travelers.
me too - it's been an absolute pleasure. Hope to 'meet' you on the 6 Jan.
It sucks, but I'm not sure I'm going to be able to make this. I have a play I'm seeing on Saturday night. Maybe I have a window for both. I certainly hope so. I'll be very disappointed not to be in that virtual room. People have given so much of themselves to this.
So good! Oh my, Linnhe, I couldn’t put this down. The writing is fantastic.
Thank you so so much 🙏
Ohh, heart-melt......read it in one breath
Love this writing
Thank you so much, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. 🙏